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By Ghost
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08 December 2007 |
Intricate snowflakes meander
Cascading snow upon snow
Sprinkles of makeshift snowman
Content in the cold wintry blow
Flagons of warm salutation
Keep icy cold tendrils at bay
Perusing the cards of endearment
From acquaintances so far away
Butterflied anticipation
Unrelenting denies children sleep
Perchance to catch fairytale glimpses
Of Santa in twinkle-toed creep
Neath spray of lip merging mistletoe
Two amorous hearts entwine
My first, my last, my everything
My Christmas valentine
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Written by hutmaster (134 comments posted) 8th December 2007 |
There's a charming anticipation of all the wonders here, Ghost. The language seems pitched to capture that nostalgic feeling and works in that respect.
Maybe some punctuation? Just to assist with the flow of the read.
Couldn't help thinking of Barry (Snow) White in that penultimate line.
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Written by Phil (6629 comments posted) 8th December 2007 | Chestnuts roasting on an open fire....
Very Christmassy, nice flow.
Phil | Cheers
Written by Ghost (21 comments posted) 8th December 2007 | Cheers hutmaster
Punctuation was never my thing
Barry (Snow) White the song has significant meaning
Phil
WOW nothing negative I’m very disappointed
Cheers all the same, and a merry Christmas to you both.  |
Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 9th December 2007 | | Oh, lovely. Aren't you the lucky one! |
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