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Poetry
Fog
By Chinaski
11 December 2007
When it was cold
and humid

I could feel the featherlike touch of air
Only my steps are heard
As if I was walking on broken glass

Wrapped up in a thick
white veil
Blocking my sight

Darkness has fallen and
the streetlights are throwing
sporadic, yellow beams
that rise towards the sky

Like a thousand warm breaths
on a winter cold night

A car passes
The thumping music
ebbs out into the night
like a stifled yawn

Precious silence is here again

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Written by Josie (2796 comments posted) 11th December 2007
You have painted a very descriptive scene here. I'm not sure that "Like a thousand warm breaths on a winter cold night" should be set apart from the streetlights that are being described. I liked the little final line. Beautifully done!

Written by Jenog (3 comments posted) 11th December 2007
Very atmospheric. I like it. It reminds me of those precious moments of peace when I walk to the train station in the morning when the roads are still quiet. 

Written by Jenog (3 comments posted) 11th December 2007
Very atmospheric. I like it. It reminds me of those precious moments of peace when I walk to the train station in the morning when the roads are still quiet. 
Yes,
Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 13th December 2007
agree with Josie and Jenog, puts you right in the picture. 
 
Lovely!

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