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By audrie
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13 December 2007 |
This may well be an answer to Bagheera's poem about two people splitting up after years!
This was also a song, but from a woman's point of view! I'm caught in a cage of loving hands
And they just won't set me free,
I've been true to you for so many years
Now, I have to be true just to me.
Please open the cage of loving hands
I don't want to force them wide,
But I hear the beat of a different drum
And I can't keep in step by your side.
I must go where the voice of Destiny calls,
I must find the courage to break free,
I must seek some peace for my mind and my soul,
I must find my harmony.
I know I will cause you pain and tears
And that grief will fill my mind,
But I'm running ahead to the golden light
While you are still walking so blind.
My quest may take me to different lands
To find the one who is me.
So, please open the cage of loving hands
And set this prisoner free.
And when I'm gone don't weep for me.
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Written by Fledermaus (3321 comments posted) 13th December 2007 | Doesn't sound like a good attitude to me. From my point of view she's just projecting her own insecurity on her relationship. What will she do when she breaks free? Start to long for prince Charming, who either does not exist or is not interested in her?
Yet apparently women for some reason often doubt their relationships. I used to be good at comforting people after a break-up, but I'm afraid I've become rather too cynical...
Still a good poem though  | Interesting
Written by patterjack (1201 comments posted) 13th December 2007 | Especially from the viewpoint of one married almost 60 years! I don't necessarily subscribe to those feelings myself , but it is , I think , a part at times of every relationship , even the best.
Small points : breal / break . And I think the last line in a way negates the spirit of the rest of the poem . I would drop it .
patteerjack
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Written by Josie (2796 comments posted) 13th December 2007 | | I think the person in this poem feels suffocated and needs to be set free from someone who is ruling her. If this is a man-woman relationship, it happens when one partner tries to dominate or change the other. Many young people see love as the bonding of one person with another body and soul. This doesn't work. Everyone is an individual and needs growing space, and as you continue along life's way, you change and develop your own self, your own interests. If your partner isn't given space to do this, the marriage will fail I think. Now you wouldn't find my husband writing anything, let alone poetry. We are quite different but have blended together well for more than 40 years. | Cage of Loving Hands
Written by embro (126 comments posted) 14th December 2007 | Wow... This is raw emotion. It is a strong message and it comes across easily to the reader. I wouldn't like to be on the receiving end though in real life.
I like it very much.
regards
embro
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Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 14th December 2007 | Thanks to all for your comments.
Yes, Josie, you are right about the suffocation, but I just couldn't hurt another's feelings. Too sensitive by far. I've grown a tougher skin by now.
Patterjack, I've tried it without the last line but it seems to stop too abruptly. Does anyone else have any ideas about it? With or without?
Fledermaus, you could be right about the insecurities, I never did have much faith in myself, but I stuck it out for 20 years, then he betrayed me! I'm not laying blame, it takes two to make a relationship work, as Josie said, but it has to be on an equal footing, which it wasn't!
Embro, many thaks for your comments. | patterjack
Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 14th December 2007 | | many thanks for pointing out the typo. |
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