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Angel's Wings
By Jenog
16 December 2007
I woke up this morning with this poem running through my head.

Angels with beautiful wings,
Stare dully at the floor,
They’ve been here for years,
And they’ll be here for many more. 

Now that they’ve done everything,
Seven times or more,
Days still stretch to infinity,
And there’s no where left to explore. 

The old man with his beard long,
Watches over it all,
On his gilded throne he sits,
And hardly moves at all.

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Are You Sure?
Written by Josie (2844 comments posted) 16th December 2007
They say that angels work very hard, with no time to stare at the floor. They may not appreciate the fact that you say they stare dully at your floor. ha ha. You might have to re-write this tomorrow when you get some new inspiration. Lovely poem though.

Written by Phil (6951 comments posted) 16th December 2007
Infinity is, perhaps, a bit of a drag. It even sounds as if the old man himself is a bit fed up. If he is up there perhaps it's about time he got off his arse and did something useful. 
 
Nice idea. We often think of angels as perfect - but the idea that they are bored - have seen it all before is a good one. I wonder if this could be phrased differently. I think the rhyming structure has limited your expression. 
 
Phil

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