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Like the good Soldier He was
270 Augustas Valente did what he was told,
" best that way mate, keep yer nose clean"
it offended him, for he was a decent chap,
a sensitive chap,
but orders are orders, yer know.
So 270 Augustas Valente did not hesitate
as he slit the throat of the
child and it's parents
in that manger snugand warm,
he carried out his orders
like a good soldier should.
later,
after the slaughter was done
270 Augustas Valente met his
mates in the mess and had a
beer or ten. |
Written by Phil (6845 comments posted) 16th December 2007 | | I wonder how many messiahs we've lost? |
Written by Scrawl (80 comments posted) 17th December 2007 | | Very thought provoking - as Phil said how many did we lose |
Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 17th December 2007 | | Erm... Who is Augustas Valente? I probably can't say anything useful about this until I know that. | thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 17th December 2007 | PhIL, Scrawl, Fledermaus for you comments,
yes how many indeed!!
Fledermaus, Augustas Valenta is just a name I have given to the Roman Foot Soldier in the piece, that's all, he is just an ordinary Roman Soldier.
Bernie |
Written by fellpony (1658 comments posted) 22nd December 2007 | Bernie, I assume you're referring to the slaughter of the Innocents at the order of Herod the Great - something not much mentioned at this time of year although very much bound up with the Christmas Gospel tale. I think it was only male babies that were killed then though, not the parents too, so perhaps you are on a different track.
I would end with the line "like a good soldier should". Leave the last stanza out. The rest is sufficiently shocking. | hi fellpony
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 22nd December 2007 | thanks for comments and suggestions.
this is abit of a mis-mash, a what if kind of thing?
Herod was of course in my mind when I wrote this but I tried to focus it on the "what if"
Jesus and his parents were killed by the Romans?
a different world maybe?
for better or worse?
Thanks Again.
Bernie |
Written by Josie (2825 comments posted) 11th January 2008 | | Jesus was born into a world very similar to our world today. Two thousand years have not changed man's nature. He may have been born in a warm stable, but outside the door was poverty, greed, man's uncaring nature. His words of "love your neighbour as yourself" hasn't had an impact on people at all, and if he came back today he would find things the same. But the change comes about when each one of us wakes up in the morning and replaces hate with love in our hearts - not one or two of us, but everyone. There are still people in exile, escaping terror and killing today, as was his first move in life. People think of the baby in the manger, but they don't think of Mary, Joseph and baby Jesus as refugees - exiles to a foreign land soon afterwards. So, what other than his message of "love" makes any sense in this world? | Thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 12th January 2008 | Josie for your comments and for taking the time.
Bernie |
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