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A hoot ....
Written by patterjack (1053 comments posted) 19th December 2007 |
.. or was that a passing owl , bearing mail ?
Will they sweep the streets of crime ?
patterjack |
Hi Jane
Written by jean.day (2190 comments posted) 20th December 2007 |
| Another very funny piece. I particularly liked the last paragraph. |
Written by woody44 (760 comments posted) 20th December 2007 |
A case of ` pigs might fly` perhaps? I now have this lovely mental image of beefy coppers in a tutu. Priceless. Loved the armed wand response unit. This is a real Christmas tonic Jane, and as always well thought out.
All the best
Roger |
Written by hutmaster (134 comments posted) 20th December 2007 |
This is good all the way through but 'takes off' at para 4 and had this reader first smiling and then laughing aloud when the politician began 'ribitting'. The mixture of sounds and very effective scene setting make this a highly accomplished piece which deserves to be read.
I just wished that it was longer as the imaginative use of constrained language and anarchic happenings is a very potent mix.
Thanks for the laughs.
hm |
Written by fellpony (1507 comments posted) 20th December 2007 |
| Agree with hutmaster, the thing really takes off towards the middle (why am I getting this tutu image here) and I laughed aloud at the "hole in the space time continuum" being coned off - I was expecting something scientific from the police here and you really caught me with the banal cones image. I thought you could have stopped at "ribit ribit" ... or else gone on to even further flights of fancy. But it's the funniest Christmas card of the year, for me. |
The Police.....
Written by embro (126 comments posted) 21st December 2007 |
Hilarious ! There is a lot of very funny content in this short piece. I had a really good laugh.
It reads well and held my interest. |
Written by Phil (6383 comments posted) 21st December 2007 |
Not much to add, Jane. With the above, a good read that got funnier as I read on.
Good stuff,
Phil |
Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 2nd January 2008 |
Mrs. Rowling probably envies you for this one. Much better than her scary dementors  What about brooms without lighting? |
Each to their own
Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 28th January 2008 |
Mrs B,
Made me smile here and there, but a bit overdone, I suspect.
Not as good as your previous piece about John Prescot, imho. But nevertheless full of colour and ideas, which I'm sure that you could develop.
Pete |
Written by coosh (822 comments posted) 31st January 2008 |
| Nice to pop back and see you've still been "at it" here - perhaps not as acerbic as some of your offerings, but raised a few good smiles, and left me with the interesting image of a teenager joyriding a pumpkin. |
Well done, Jane!
Written by AmeliaWonderland (22 comments posted) 12th March 2008 |
| Very witty and entertaining. Made me laugh all the way through. Does have a Rowling-esque feel to it, but a lot better written. So who cares! |
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