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By maipenrai
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27 December 2007 |
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Graffiti,
it makes the place look untidy,
dirty
unkept,
Graffiti writers should be made to
eat paint, then
painted in graffiti
be sent on the road
of Divine Inspiration
which is to be found
at the bottom of my garden,
where the goldfish swim in
ever decreasing circles. |
Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 28th December 2007 | Aren't you lucky to have a road to Divine Inspiration in your garden?
I think some graffiti is quite clever, but know what you mean. | Thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 29th December 2007 | Audrie for your comments.
my "garden " consist of three house plants, live in a flat! |
Written by jammycarrot (50 comments posted) 3rd January 2008 | The idea is very clever, and i love the last 6 lines.
However, please please consider changing the start. I feel its just too......bland, really. It doesn't do anything for me. The single word graffiti i feel is unecessary given the title, and the description could be more concise and poetry feeling (makes no sense i know) hope you know what i mean.
With that exception though, this is a great poem
Jam |
Written by Fledermaus (3470 comments posted) 3rd January 2008 | Might work. Somehow I can sometimes pity thieves or even worse criminals, when it appears there is some reasoning behind their actions (such as poverty or vengeance), but vandals are totally beyond my understanding. Why destroy something for the sole purpose of destruction?
I once saw a sad movie about a little girl who was beaten up by her father and sought refuge at a neighbour's home. The old man made her a woodcut and she told him that what people made with their hands betrayed their personality: The old man made beautiful things, while the girl's father used to break people's noses...
Somehow I have to think of that film when I see how people vandalize other people's stuff. Doesn't that betray they are rotten to their very core? | Thanks
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 4th January 2008 | Jam and Fledermaus for your comments.
jam, liked your suggestion and will give it some thought.
fledermaus, in the area that i live we get gangs of yobs destroying bus shelters, telephone boxes, painting graffiti on shop shutters, windows, cars etc, not nice and you wonder whats going on in their tiny tiny brains.
bernie |
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