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How Satisfying.
By Xielzen
28 September 2005
This won a poetry compeition at college. They're meant to be about food. I was told it had to toy with senses. So hopefully that's what I did.

Satisfying.


 Midnight.
 No birds take their flight.
 The bell tolls..

 I stand alone in the dark,
 Hearing the beat of your heart,
 Sliding blood through my veins,
 Though I cannot complain..

 A body so frail,
 Eyes so Innocent,
 Sweet blood is something that can't fail,
 To please our undying sixth scent..

 Laid upon the fresh grass,
 You will not be the last,
 So pale under the stars,
 Don't worry it's not that far..

 Piercing the flesh,
 Oh it seems so fresh,
 Taking more and more,
 Opening up the dark , dismal door,
 To Lascivious Legerdemain..

 Now laid on the couch,
 A largness now in my pouch,
 Watching you dine, Devour,
 Arousing, after each hour,

 Without any force,
 It's Cherry Sauce,
 Which pleases us this hour.

 How..Satisfying..

Reviews

Written by Missinginaction (37 comments posted) 9th October 2005
Hmm. It must have hit the spot as far as the assignment went, but too many of the rhymes are forced. If you want to get to grips with rhyming poetry, have a look at the work of Felix Dennis: there the rhymes arte original and unforced and I hope you'll see what I mean. Congratulations on winnig the comp - it will look good on your writing CV! Thanks for the read. Keep posting. 
 
- Missing

Written by IPFaulkner (83 comments posted) 29th May 2006
Not sure this is my kind of thing. Hardish to follow and perhaps unecesarily complicated. Unfortunately still far better than any poetry I could ever manage!  
 
Congratulations on the win. 
 
IPF

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