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Poetry
Indemnify
By maipenrai
28 December 2007
How can you say that?
how can you say that you
will make it up to me,
you are not real,
you cannot be real
to say such a thing.

How can you ever make up for the
pain you have caused me,
the heartache
the sleepless nights,
tears on my pillow
how can you make up for that?
how can you indemnify me
you lost the bloody tickets
for the game.

Reviews

Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 28th December 2007
I was expecting some sad story and it's ONLY tickets for some game. You men!

Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 28th December 2007
ONLY !!!!!! the tickets for the Game!!!! 
shame on you Audrie :grin :grin :grin  
Bernie

Written by jillrabbit (57 comments posted) 28th December 2007
I would love to hear this read aloud!!
Thanks
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 29th December 2007
Jill for your comments . 
Bernie

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3331 comments posted) 29th December 2007
I think I agree with Jill, some pieces work better as performance works they,are made to be spoken and this is one of them. With the right emphasis and pauses it would be even funnier 
jane
Thanks
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 29th December 2007
Jane, I agree, never done stand up and i am very shy :grin :grin :grin  
Bernie

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