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By jillrabbit
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28 December 2007 |
I'm sure it was like this, wasn't it?
When we were small
we watched them fall
Snowflakes, spiralling to earth,
In the freezing, winter night
Swirls and eddies rushing round
A street lamp bright
Into the arms of the hardened ground.
Dusting the misty windowpanes
Leaving elegant, lacy manes
Where our eager breath
touched tenderly.
When we awoke the following day
A huge unbroken mantle lay
Before us, trees clad finely
For the year's end
Drifts, planted with such precision
Making garden paths and fences blend
Into one continous carpet.
We wrapped up well
And, with joyous yells,
Stuffed hands in gloves
To hurtle loudly out to play
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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 28th December 2007 | It probably wasn't like that - but it's how I remember it - so effective bit of verse. Snow is a bit of a rarity these days. I love driving at night on counry lanes while the snow comes down. The headlights pick out each flake and as they get nearer they seem to curve towards the windscreen. Phil | hi Jill Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 29th December 2007 | another that I enjoyed. Bernie | Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 29th December 2007 | I liked this very much, brought back memories of sliding down hills on tin trays. I love the delicate tracery of snowflakes under a magnifying glass, just beautiful patterns. Clever old Mother Nature. | Hello Jill Written by Josie (2786 comments posted) 22nd January 2008 | | Jill, I really loved your poem, and agree with what has been said. Just one little question: Why did you do the verses differing lengths? It may be just me, but I always do mine the same length - not that this is compulsory by any means. I've missed you on the children's section lately. |
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