Children have a knack of helping themselves to your chocolates over the Christmas period - or if not them, their father. But, just tell yourself that they are doing you a favour.
Mum, just a note to let you know
Why your chocolate’s disappeared.
You’ll have your own suspicions,
And they’ll be exactly as you feared.
For I saw them on the table,
When I came down in the night
I couldn’t think what I could eat,
Then your chocolates came in sight.
I wanted just to look at them,
Well, to examine them for fun.
The smell of chocolate tempted me
And I thought I’d take just one.
The taste was so delicious
That I took another one –
This led me on to several more,
Oh please forgive me Mum.
Perhaps you might be pleased with me
Thinking what I’ve done was great,
For by my eating all your chocolates,
You won’t pile on the weight.
Copyright 2007
www.whiteheadm.co.uk
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Written by Fledermaus (3160 comments posted) 29th December 2007 | | Heheh... Yes and true: They still got to grow. Their mum does not. |
Written by Phil (6435 comments posted) 29th December 2007 | Sounds about right, Josie. I can put chocolates away for a special occasion - or just a greed fest - and return weeks later to find them all gone. Doesn't help the weight gain though. I can manage that without chocolates.
Phil | I can put chocolates away too
Written by fellpony (1519 comments posted) 29th December 2007 | usually in my mouth  Taught by years of experience of competing family Nice bit of whimsy Josie! |
Written by hutmaster (134 comments posted) 30th December 2007 | Fun poem, Josie.
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Written by punchy (384 comments posted) 31st December 2007 | | Great poem Josie. x | I Can Relate!
Written by TurboWolffe (97 comments posted) 1st January 2008 | You just have that certain whit, josie! I don't know what it is, but you always nail it when i read.
anyway's, yeah, I can realate to te chocolate thing. My mom says I'm obsessive compulsive about it. I suppose that's true, but it's sooooooo good! In fact, although it's 2:24 A.M., i think i'll go sneak some. don't stop me! I'll be there before you guys are done partying!
It's 2008, time to celebrate!
-TW
(now i have to write my signature w/ a little '08 above it!) | Thank you
Written by Josie (2531 comments posted) 1st January 2008 | | Thank you everyone for your reviews. It's especially nice to have the young review from TurboWolffe because this was written for your age group. |
Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 2nd January 2008 | Josie,
THIS I like; no treacle, no effort, no over-cloying; simply stated as it is.
PTV
Is it possible that we have met? On a winter's day? And talked of Post Offices, and poetry, and sundry other things?
If I am The Walrus, you are, indeed, the Carpenter; but we ought not walk hand in hand, on moors bar't'at!
Thank you for pointing me in this direction. P | Ahh - the penny dropped
Written by Josie (2531 comments posted) 4th January 2008 | | Yes indeed. Fate threw you right into my firing line. We did speak of post offices, poetry and sundry other things. So now you know how we capture new members for Great Writing. Welcome. Thanks for your review. |
Written by brook_rivers (484 comments posted) 14th March 2008 | Loved this poem Josie, I think adults as well as children can relate to the temptations of chocolate, especially with the easter period coming up now!
Brook | Josie, lovely poem...
Written by mia_ms_kim (915 comments posted) 15th March 2008 | reallyh lovely, like many of your other poems...
I particularly love this one, especially the ending! It sounds so much like my hubby, who tells our 5-year old child, 'Son, this stuff is bad for you, very bad, so Daddy will finish it all.' And he does.
Mia  |
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