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Gwenhwyfar
By Fledermaus
02 January 2008

She looked at the fresco and felt a tear roll down over her cheek. Gently she touched the wall and moved her finger along the contours of the female figure. Eve was naked, her face distorted in despair, hands vainly raised towards Heaven. The apple's core lay in the dust at her feet.

For the first time in her life she had known shame and with it cursed all that came of her flesh and her blood, till the day of doom.

High above there was the eye that saw everything. How could they ever have imagined to escape from its sight?

Merciful, was he? She wiped the drop off her face and looked at the man. His body was muscular and his face handsome, but upon it an expression of equal dread, for he too had tasted the apple.

She felt sick, knowing it was the fruit's flesh that burned inside her. It had been woken by lust. Ever since her first sinful thought, she had bled. Every month she suffered the inheritance of Eve.

" And you?", she whispered as she looked at the naked man pleading to God, "What is your punishment?"

The priests said that it was because of Eve that he had fallen. If she had not tempted him, would he have wanted knowledge between good and evil?

" It's unfair", she muttered and she slammed the palm of her hand against the wall.

" Unfair, bloody unfair!"

Who had asked for the creation of Eve? Out of whose bones had she been made? Was she ever given a choice? Had they ever asked her anything?

" Have you ever asked me, Arthur?"

Her voice resounded through the chapel and she could not suppress her tears any longer. They followed the first one and burned on her cheeks.

" Ever asked me if I wanted to be a queen?"

Then she touched the painting again.

" Oh Eve", she muttered.

Adam playing innocent, blaming his wife. But was he not just as guilty. How much had she accepted? Arthur, the great Arthur had slept with his own half-sister, who had given him the son he wanted.

" He shall be your downfall Arthur!", she cried," Your sin is immeasurably greater than mine. Yet who is called the adulterer and the sinful woman? Have you ever asked me anything? There I sat at your side, while I knew what you had done, sat there keeping up your honour. King Arthur's beautiful wife, always gentle and behaved, virtuous and proud..."

She raised her hands and resembled the figures on the fresco.

" Why? Because I am a woman? He can go around making war, burning villages and pillaging castles. He sets out to Gaul or Caledonia and leaves me fearing for him and when he returns does he ever comfort me? Months I waited for him, months!"

She glanced at the painted animals and flowers of the lost paradise.

" Who was allowed to name the animals and the trees? What did you create her for? Just to provide him with company? Just for his pleasure? Of course he was allowed to enjoy himself, wasn't he? After all he was created after your image... Tell me then, whose image are we created after?"

She clasped her breasts and looked up at the ceiling defiantly.

" Created as sinners, aren't we? Tempting, seducing, bringing death and destruction. For it's of course my fault that the round table is empty. My fault. The cunning woman who couldn't control her lust, who seduced the noblest of knights. We're only a threat to your purity aren't we? Aren't you ashamed Arthur? How many women have you slept with? Chosen to sleep with! Chosen!"

She waited and then bowed her head. What use was it to scream at a ceiling? She had insulted him, the last one who listened.

" Forgive me, my Lord", she whispered and she folded her hands, " I should be grateful... Forgive me."

A door was opened and she heard how someone approached. She did not look, she knew who it was. She recognized the sound of his footsteps and as he came closer, she felt his warmth.

" Gwenhwyfar..."

" Go away", she whispered.

" Gwen."

" People are talking."

" I don't care."

He embraced her, caressed her hair and pressed his lips against her neck. She wanted to pull away from his hands, to be alone...

" Go", she whispered.

" You have been crying."

" Leave me alone, Lancelot."

She pushed him away and walked out of the chapel, leaving the knight in front of the fresco depicting the expulsion from Eden.

 

Reviews
confusing, but interesting
Written by fellpony (1507 comments posted) 2nd January 2008
Nice setting and use of the fresco as a sounding board for Gwen's thoughts.  
 
I think your use of pronouns (he, she) makes this hard to follow in places and perhaps more obscure than you intended. I did find it hard to follow Gwen's thoughts; they don't always make sense to me because I'm not sure which "he" she is talking to - Arthur, Lancelot, or God? But I felt by saying less as author you got the tone just right in the passage between Lancelot and Gwen at the end. 
 
Some unusual language constructions that you might want to reconsider -  
 
- "She rose her hands" = "She raised her hands." You want the transitive verb "raised", not the intransitive "rose". 
 
- "she heard how someone approached" = "she heard someone approaching" 
 
Couple of typos ("who's" = "whose") and punctuation (" It's unfair", she muttered - the comma goes inside the quoatation marks)

Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 2nd January 2008
Thanks Sue, 
I can understand it's confusing. It's something I wondered about too, for her thoughts seem to shift from the picture to her own situation and back, from Arthur to God and Adam (Lancelot comes only into it when he really shows up)... I tried to think what she sort of person she'd be. I had imagined a somewhat stronger personality, but this is what I ended up with ;-) 
 
I'll have a look at the typos. I always mess up "rising and "raising" :sigh  
 
Thanks :)
oops
Written by fellpony (1507 comments posted) 2nd January 2008
I meant Adam, really I did.
Hi Fledermaus
Written by jean.day (2196 comments posted) 2nd January 2008
I really liked this one, and got more out of it the second time around. I like Gwen's views of Eve's getting blamed, and all the comparisons. 
 
Somewhere amongst my writings, you will find a story about Eve (actually a sermon given by my father-in-law) which I find a much nicer way to think of her.

Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 2nd January 2008
Thanks Jean. 
It seems the story about Adam and Eve has been changed almost as many times as that of king Arthur. I have thought of having her mention Lilith, but somehow I imagine Gewnhwyfar (Guinevere) as a devout Christian, so she probably wouldn't use that name in a church. I'll htry to find your story. :)

Written by Phil (6393 comments posted) 3rd January 2008
Enjoyed the read, Fledermaus. 
 
Another history lesson wrapped up in your writing - and not overdone either. 
 
Phil.
King Arthur
Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 4th January 2008
Thanks Phil. Although wether it's "history"... I have serious doubts as to wether king Arthur ever existed. That's what makes his myth so great to write about: The historical context is minimal (there are even different versions of Britain's history) and there are numerous versions of the story.

Written by Asferthecat (789 comments posted) 5th January 2008
Arthur had a son by Morgause - his half sister and wife of King Lot - not by Morgan (his sister). 
I read somewhere that Guineviere represents a goddess of the land. There are several legends (eg King Mark and Isolde) where a rift between the king and his goddess-wife causes the kingdom to become a wasteland. People were probably trying to explain why they were sometimes hit by famine and pestilence. 
As usual you bring the characters to life with great skill and imagination
Morgause :-o
Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 5th January 2008
Thanks Asferthecat. First I had 'his half-sister' in it, I changed it to Morgan for some reason (Should have been Morgause, but that sounded to French to my taste). Now changed it back. Strange, how the Hollywood versions sometimes seem to have such an impact. On the other hand, I think one might be a little careless when it's about king Arthur, as he is fantasy anyhow. :-D 
 
Could very well be that Gwenhwyfar was a queen-goddess. It was pretty common amongst the Celts to have the queen fulfill such a role and it would indeed explain a lot. If I'm going to extend this I'll certainly take that into account, for it would make her adultery all the more painful. It opens a lot more possibilities I think, as somehow I can't imagine her as such a powerful figure as say Medb (queen-goddess of Connacht) or other known equivalents.  
 
Thanks for mentioning that :D

Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 5th January 2008
"sovereignty goddess" is the word I sought. Thanks :)

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