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Things My Mother Taught Me

By twriter

02 January 2008

January Lazy Writers' Topic.

All comments more than welcome.

Things My Mother Taught Me

Taking items from the under stairs cupboard, she pauses.

He touched these things last.

It has taken her a long time to do the same.

She smells his smell and cries.

Once a row of smiling faces looked up at her

from a classroom floor.

What can she teach now?

Here’s the lesson:

Restraint and patience,

As she opens the door to another

Sympathizing; nosey neighbour,

As her son watches on.

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Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 2nd January 2008

Ah, at last - and then there were two! A while to go - but laziness abounds.

I liked this very much. It had what I often look for in a novel - generational issues, back story, emotion. (If you fancy a good novel, try anything by John Irving)

I read (or mumble - depends if there's anyone around) poetry aloud. I kept wanting to leave out the as in the last line.

A more than worthy Lazt Writers submission.

Lovely.

Phil

Thanks Phil
Written by twriter (117 comments posted) 2nd January 2008

Yes, that 'as'. I think you've definately got a point with that. Glad you enjoyed it - now come on people!!!

VBW,

TW

HI Twriter
Written by jean.day (2326 comments posted) 2nd January 2008

I think that is a lovely bit of poetry. And your mother sounds like a really lovely caring person.

Maybe I'll have a go at the challenge tomorrow.

Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 2nd January 2008

Hi,
There are so many things which can touch us, years after an event. I think you've crystallised something here - the sense of smell evoking memories lying dormant. We all recognise this; it can be anything - a chord in music, a sunset, a taste, a glimpse of something not in full view. They can be heart-stopping.
In the practical realm, I am not convinced that 'nosey' has an 'e' in it.
But that is Lynn Truss land.
Thanks for sharing.
PTV

Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 3rd January 2008

Lovely evocative poem of loss and stoicism, of your Mum.

Let's have more.

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