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Booby slings
By punchy
03 January 2008
This one needs illustration so you'll have to imagine!


I love bras I think they're fab
But no one likes them more than dad
When mum's busy washing clothes
My daddy creeps up on his toes

We wait until we hear the shout
As mummy's giant boobs fall out
  We all cheer, he's such a star
My sneaky dads undone her bra

My brother calls them booby slings
And uses them for hamster swings
He says it makes their life more fun
But that one doesn't sit with mum

The twins they wear them like a hat
Or catapult them at the cat
The cat joins in and acts all cross
And chews them like they're dental floss

The fancy ones my sister wears
And fills them up with teddy bears
She dances round with sheer delight
She says she grew them over night

But best of all, the one I like
Is when we tie them to our kite
And watch them fly like Lacey wings
Those lovely frilly booby slings



Innocent

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Written by patterjack (1429 comments posted) 2nd January 2008
... they make great earmuffs 
 
patterjack

Written by Josie (2844 comments posted) 3rd January 2008
Very funny Paula. They're too expensive to use as catapults I think.

Written by Fledermaus (3477 comments posted) 3rd January 2008
Heheh... Great. What a lot of imagination. They're obviously multi-functional :D
A Welsh TV comedy
Written by fellpony (1702 comments posted) 3rd January 2008
one had the deathless line: "Mam - can I use Phyllis Doris's bra for a Viking 'elmet?" 
 
I enjoyed the fun in this :) 
 
Spelling: line 2 - know one = no-one. 
 
I would swop lines 7 and 8!
Thanks Fellpony
Written by punchy (533 comments posted) 3rd January 2008
I have done as you suggested and it reads much better. 
Cheers guys x

Written by Lizzy (827 comments posted) 4th January 2008
Like this. A good fun read with some lovely images. 
As you say illustrations would be really good with it. 
Lizzy

Written by Phil (6951 comments posted) 5th January 2008
Lovely. Best one of yours I've read I reckon. Again, if it can raise a laugh - it's worth its weight. 
 
Loved the title. 
 
Phil
Booby slings
Written by TheWackyWordsmith (12 comments posted) 12th January 2008
What more can one say??!! 
 
The master writes yet another winner!! 
 
Lovely stuff!!  
 
:grin  
 
Brice.
Hilarious!
Written by Brett (979 comments posted) 23rd August 2008
Just found this, Paula. What a wonderfully funny poem. 
Though I dare say that I shall be haunted later tonight by the image of patterjack wearing his earmuffs! 
Loved this. 
Cheers

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