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How to behave when waiting (Things my Mother taught me)
By jillrabbit
03 January 2008
Many visits as a child to places where I had to wait outside quietly, as I'd been taught...

Needless to say, I wait very impatiently now!

Distantly, 'I won't be long' she goes.
The corridor lengthens with each echoing click of her heels
As I sit squirming
but attached firmly.
Watching, waiting, gaze drawn to the floor where
Slow motion motes dance in the sun's rays
The silence more than I can bear.

So, feet swinging rhythmically,
Chair-creaking boredom sets in.
My space is a soundproofed island
invaded by muffled talk
crawling out uneasily,
under the door
to reach ears straining with the effort
to understand.

My patience shrinks to a knot in my stomach
Then silence is shattered by small talk
I crane my neck to see
Through a forest of legs and laughter
Simpers and handshakes,
Her smile comes down to rescue me
Nods her reward and reaches down
With an unspoken
'Good girl for waiting quietly'

Reviews

Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 2nd January 2008
Very well written, I remember that feeling. My girls wait for nothing!

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 2nd January 2008
Reminds me of interminable religious gatherings I was dragged along to. Effectively written. 
 
Phil

Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 2nd January 2008
Nothing to say but EXCELLENT! 
PTV

Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 2nd January 2008
Although, having said EXCELLENT (which this is) I have a slight misgiving about the title; unless it is a part of a series - TMMTM. Being new, I am only coming across people slowly. But this piece creaks of silence & boredom; wonderful. 
PTV

Written by jillrabbit (57 comments posted) 3rd January 2008
Hi PTV 
The title is unwieldy but I just felt like joining in the TMMTM series for a laugh.  
 
Phil - This idea could form a collection of poems one day! You could write the foreword.(Tee Hee)

Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 3rd January 2008
I thought this was a very good poem, brought back lots of memories, when kids were taught to have respect for their parents, and did as they were told! Days long gone!

Written by Carly (9 comments posted) 3rd January 2008
Fantastic - those words remind me of my youth! 
:grin

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