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In The Quiet Beauty Of Her Womanhood
By petetheverse
03 January 2008
Prose in verse form? Or is it, possibly, a poem?

In The Quiet Beauty Of Her Womanhood

 

 


Lines written upon the marriage of a beloved niece

on Saturday, 19th. October 2002

at the church of St.Mary, St.Fagans, Cardiff

 

 



In the quiet beauty of her womanhood,

tall, serene and slender in the day’s pale gown,

the bride smiles privately behind her veil,

this final step the last first step upon her journey.

Her groom perceives this unseen smile,

leans his own smile forward in response,

and with a loving deference

receives her to her future place beside him.

 

 

The congregation shares a collective, silent sigh,

for they too have been awaiting on a moment

so singular in its individual significance,

yet so expressive in the minds of many,

their unsighed sighs as many genuflections

to their memories and history.

 

 

"Dearly beloved, we are gathered together ... ."

The priest so soothing, the hymns so certain,

the prayers so honest, each voice so firm,

the ring so golden, the kiss so gentle;

the plangent descant of choir and organ

emotive of the echoes of quiet,

ancient ceremonies still circulating

within these ancient, quiet walls.

 

 

The now-raised veil, the slow procession,

the joyous smiles, the low-murmured recognition,

the broaching into sunlight, the pressing throng,

the touching cheeks, the clasping hands;

this swirling breeze of discreet congratulation

amidst these ancient stones, these burnished autumn trees.

 

 

The togetherness of the limousine;

the reception of the guests; the pride of parents;

the pleasure, evident, of friends;

the speeches, evoking laughter, tears.

And throughout these scenes,

underscoring all, is one pervading, ancient phrase:

"Those whom God hath joined together,

let no man put asunder".

Reviews

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 3rd January 2008
I think you probably had to there. The type of poem that will probably go down very well with some readers, but not my taste. As a map through a wedding ceremony, it does the business, but it reads (to me) like a stylised list of points with added personal commentary. I think possibly, I find the perfection of the piece a little sickly sweet. Not to say there's no skill behind the lines. 
 
Just one opinion. Sorry. As I say, I'm sure there are many who will like this. 
 
Phil

Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 3rd January 2008
Agree with Phil- I feel like you're not saying much here, and descend into lengthy descriptions rather than opening the reader's eyes to something new.
Response to critiques
Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 3rd January 2008
Thanks, both. 
You are probably right - I've always had the feeling that this may have been a bit mawkish. 
I do take the point that in some respects it's a bit of a list, as well, but it may contain a few lines that people recognise. 
Not to worry - that's what this page is all about! 
PTV 
And the pair of you have the experience of multiple commentaries behind you; so that's fine by me.

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