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Non-Fiction
Facade
By ErikaRain
04 January 2008
I don't know what to say about this piece at all. It's just me, it's more my style. I write about personal things. I suppose most of it sounds like fantasy, but this is actually how I think.

Sometimes when I close my eyes, I can see myself more clearly than if I were staring straight into a mirror. I see me, floating. Nothing above me, nothing below me. It’s pitch black, but I’m not afraid. Somehow I welcome the darkness and embrace it. I’m surrounded by music, this wonder symphony plays on and on and I’m caught up in it. Then out of nowhere, the sun begins to rise, blanketing the dark sky in a  crimson red and filling me with the purest light. Then I see below me the bluest deepest ocean. The water is so clear, that I can see fish and whales and other sea creatures swimming below me. That’s what I want it to be like when I open my eyes. I want to be free. Who I am in real life is a façade. The real me, is that girl, flying as free as a bird into that sunrise. Nothing above me, nothing below me..........

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Written by Fledermaus (3301 comments posted) 4th January 2008
Liked it. Yes, I'd call it fantasy, but then, doesn't everyone have them? Nice little piece.

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 4th January 2008
Interesting to have an insight into another psyche. I'd be interested to know how old you are - it seems like a vision of the young, not middle aged. (Not a suggestion that the writing is immature BTW.) 
 
PMed. 
 
Phil
Gorgeous Writing
Written by Amelia (30 comments posted) 4th January 2008
This was purely beautiful. I loved the gradual change and imagery. My one critique is your use of the phrase "free as a bird" because it is such a common expression. Your writing is unusual and fresh enough that this seemed odd. Otherwise, I loved this. You truly have a wonderful voice. 
 
Amelia

Written by Lizzy (800 comments posted) 4th January 2008
I did like this. Lovely images. 
Lizzy

Written by Carly (9 comments posted) 5th January 2008
I liked this alot! I actually can relate to this... 
 
I practise meditation, and the worlds we can create are very self calming.

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