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Inviting Voices
By Rattle_Spear
01 October 2005
This is dedicated to all my unknown and anonymous female fans of the Universe

My subconscious is playing tricks on my soul
This sensation is on a daily roll
In the distance and silence of the morn
My deep sleep and dreams are torn
Apart by female voices so young
Offering me pleasure, passion and fun
Who is playing all these tantalizing tricks
Or are they just my daily ""wake up"" fix
I will have to go out and investigate
Before the calls of excitement are too late
I must say it is a mortal thrill
I know that I am in demand...still!

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Written by Missinginaction ( comments posted) 9th October 2005
I don't think this is as good as your other recent contribution: the rhymes are forced, it's full of cliches and I think you could rewrite it in a more original way with a bit of effort. Sorry, but it doesn't make it for me. Remember these comments are about the writing, not you personally! 
Thanks for the read. 
 
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