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Shadows falling
By Hellcat
04 January 2008
Umm...I'm not even sure I like this one.....

Trembling on the edge of extinction,
The protection of the day's light silently ebbs,
Giving way to the night's inevitable darkness,
Covering the body in a blanket of shadows,
Plunging the mind into a pool of doubt.

The darkness forms a betraying alliance
With the fears of the irrational mind &
The fluttering of the fearful heart
As insecurity and irrationality
Become familiar companions
On the soft descent
Into madness.

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Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 4th January 2008
Quite like it actually. Though old fart that I am, I don't like '&' in place of and - it's only two more key strokes. 
 
Could be the beginning of something? 
 
Phil.

Written by Asferthecat (834 comments posted) 5th January 2008
This would be more powerful with fewer words. Too much verbosity muffles meaning.

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