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By jammycarrot
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06 January 2008 |
Ok, the less serious one of the two. I have more lines for this poem, (I actually throughly enjoyed writing this and so went a little overboard) should you feel it needs it, but was persuaded on blast to keep it sharp. Would love to hear what you all think about it though.
Enjoy
Jam
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Come on, you know you want to.
I promise I won't stick anything in my ears on dates
Or spill sauce on my shirt when I'm eating.
I've never beheaded a girlfriend before.
Come on, look.
I'm really good at making purposeless lists.
And do you really want to be known throughout history as
"The one who let "James Mollard" get away"?
You do? Oh…right…
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How Not to Pull
Written by embro (126 comments posted) 6th January 2008 | The inverted chat-up lines didn't work then?
I can't say I am surprised !
Good read, but try a new approach !(with dating) |
Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 6th January 2008 | Reading the intro, I was wondering how far you'd go with this. You avoided the Viz approach (slightly disappointed - base humour etc) but it raised a smile, so job done.
Phil. |
Written by maipenrai (783 comments posted) 6th January 2008 | agree with Phil, job done.
Bernie |
Written by punchy (500 comments posted) 6th January 2008 | | Way to go! I would have thought you were being funny and probably been impressed! |
Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 6th January 2008 | I've used lines like that!
That's why I'm twice divorced, and one of life's multiple discards into the bargain!
Learn from your elders, my boy!
PTV |
Written by jammycarrot (50 comments posted) 7th January 2008 | Embro - I tend not to use these....not that I have any luck finding women any other ways.... . I have a girlfriend and have had for some time, so i have no use for them.....
Phil - What is Viz? Sorry if that makes me look ridicliously stupid, but I'm guessing it's probably something I'm too young to know about?
I was working on a follow up poem to this, from the women's point of view. I'll have to see if I can dig it out!
Everyone else - thank you, and to Pete, keep on trying!
Jam |
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