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Pleasure( bit naughty)
By punchy
07 January 2008
Embarassed



My skin has become a canvas
 Awaiting the masters new piece
The unpredictable touch
From a passionate wild mannered beast

The apprehension it holds me
On the brink of explosive relief
As his tentative kiss unwraps at my shell
Like a diamond pursued by a thief

I give into him like a victim
He has total control of my mind
I sacrifice, my shyness and grace
And a pleasure eruption I find

Wink

Reviews

Written by Phil (5967 comments posted) 6th January 2008
Ooer Missis. 
 
Sounds like you've been having fun. 
 
Phil

Written by punchy (366 comments posted) 6th January 2008
If only! x

Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 6th January 2008
What it is to be young! Although these feelings don't ever really change - just the ability (so I'm told)! 
PTV

Written by jammycarrot (50 comments posted) 7th January 2008
:eek I'm much too young and innocent to be understanding all this. *innocent look* :p 
 
Like anyone'll believe that. I like this piece, the rhythm is good, the wording is good, and the use of metaphors stop it from turning too..... you know.... 
 
Jam

Written by audrie (443 comments posted) 7th January 2008
Ah! I remember it well! Any chance of a sequel???

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