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Unbond the bond
By aparajitha
07 January 2008
Why’s my heart pumping so hard?
Why am I so panicky?
Why my hands are twitchy?


Am I waiting for something, Or...
Somebody…
Who is that somebody,
Who is taking my breath away,


Is that you?
No!
Then who?


Free me from this!!!


Comes a voice from nowhere,
“ you are free…its your bonding that is bonding you,
Unchain from it…you will be freed”


“I brought you to this globe unaccompanied,
Want you back alone,


Get freed!!!”

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Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 8th January 2008
I feel that what you are trying to convey in these pieces is the insecurity of your being; that you need some confirmation that you are worthy. 
I am sure that you are; but I'm not sure that this type of heartfelt writing will achieve a great deal, for it seems to be circular in its form, bringing you all the time back to where you began. 
Sorry I can't be more instructive or helpful. 
PTV

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