This was just a joke i sen't to my friend cause the topic they were talking about was ghost storyes
i decided to write this story as a joke to them, anyway, enjoy :)
He was running for his life, running away from his wife, and the grafeyard containing the flesh from his son.
It all started couple of years back, when his wife gave birth to a son, it was a very beautiful child but he had never wanted a son. But the wife gave birth to twins, and the birth, his wife died. It was a desease that killed her when she finished giving birth to her second son.
The father got mad about this. He kept the son in the basement and chained him to the wall and beat him and tortured him for 12 years. His son, Alex who he loved had always loved his other brother and helped him when he had been beaten almost to death. After 12 years of torturing, his father got back from the pub, he looked angry and Alex asked what was wrong.
"THAT IS NONE OF YOUR BUSINESS" he answered.
the boy was scared to his dad, he was acting strange, he was drunk.
"i am going to kill that beast" he said.
"But what did he do dad, what did he do?"
"WHAT DID HE DO, you are asking me what he did? he killed you mother, he was a monster since he was born, and today i am going to finish him!"
"Please dad, don't do it, please don't kill him"
but he already walked away to the basement, when the child saw him, he got terryfyed, and there, his dad, his own dad tortured him and beated him to death.
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"Stupid of me to do that" he thought as he was running away from the house. It was a dark night, the sky blocking the moon, and few stars in the sky. it was raining heavely on im and he forgot to take his cote, he was to busy to get out of there, out of the ghost house. Shortly after his death, strange things began happening in the house, at first it was hust small things that he barely noticed, but later it got worse.
His son had always gone to the graveyard where he was lying and came back acting strange. One night when he came back, he was crazy. He wasn't acting like himself, nothing like himself at all. He accused his dad for being insane, for torturing the son, and then he ran to the kitchen and came back with a knife and started walking thowards him. "I shall pay you for what you did to me" he said as he was walking quietly thowards him. He got scared and ran upstairs to the bathroom and locked the door.
He wated there, and waited and put his ear thowards the door to hear. Nothing. Then a blast came and a knife appeared next to him through the door, Alex was stabbing the knife on the door until it would break.
He went out throgh the window and climbed down but fell on his back. He went to the car but it didn't start and then he saw his son in the outdoor, with a big knife in his hand, shouting: "come back.. come back so i can kill you". He got terryfied and ran away, away thowards the city, 2 km away.
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can i have a pint of what you're drinki Written by kevinrobson71 (42 comments posted) 3rd April 2005 |
| i really wanted to enjoy this but you lost me big time |
Hard to find merit here Written by tamper (18 comments posted) 3rd April 2005 |
It's a very confused piece - the thread of your story isn't really clear. Think about the narrative more and see if you can arrange a logical sequence of events. But ghost stories are a good thing, so I look forward to reading the rewrite of this one! |
Written by Blade (14 comments posted) 6th April 2005 |
| Heh, Five Days A Stranger, an AGS game and a great one. Well, if this would not be a joke than I'd say you should develop it, give it "arms and legs" and it would make a great ghost story. |
How old are you? Written by DustinBowcott (66 comments posted) 1st May 2005 |
| If you're under ten then I'd say to you to calm down. Don't get so excited that you want to rush your way through the piece. Stop and think; about every sentence if necessary. |
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