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Night a rest...
By Steve_K
08 January 2008


I awake to find myself
Locked in a room
A police station cell I imagine

Just a bed 
In the corner 
A hole in the ground

My belt has been taken
My shoes are missing
Afraid I'd commit the worst

I stand at the door
Looking through the perspex slit
Staring into nothingness
Nothingness being all

I wonder what I've done
Robbed a shop?
Killed a man?
All in my pie-eyed position

I sleep again till I wake
Prodded by a large unsightly sergeant
Into soberness with thumping head
And pumping regret

What a fucking cliche 
Drunken sailor and all that
Drunken disorder
My good record gets me off

The rush of fresh January air
Hits my face like a train
I walk to the bus station
Smoking a cigarette on the way
Shielding my eyes from the spurious Spring Sun

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Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 8th January 2008
Hi, Steve, 
Like this very much, although I'm not so sure if it is strictly a poem - i.e it's a short story in verse form; which is a thing I've done myself, so who am I to quibble? 
I like the pun in the title; although you might show it as "Night o'rest", which has the same sound but also explains the sleep from which you so rudely awaken! 
I also like the lack of punctuation, which is quite a difficult thing to achieve - perhaps why it's in verse form, for you couldn't do that in a conventional story. 
Unless you were writing original american pulp! 
One word change? "furious" for "spurious"? 
PTV

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