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Poetry
Lost Love
By aparajitha
08 January 2008
It was a dream come true,
Of which I didn’t had a cue,
He proposed me,
Hearing which I was in glee.

Our love was like a beautiful rose,
But it never got its dose,
We yearned to mince,
But the world didn’t allow us even to have a glimpse.

Our heart ached to hold hands,
But the world always tried to break the strands,
We craved for the first kiss,
But the world stopped us from enjoying that bliss,

Years after of separation,
Our hearts beat in desperation,
We still desire to be close
But now our love is like a pale rose.


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Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 8th January 2008
Hi, 
I think you're probably posting for the first time, for your piece is posted in the upper area intended for your own introduction - whereas the poem itself should go in the large area below that. 
Just a pointer. 
Not quite sure what to make of this; your use of language is slightly unusual, and so it takes a little to adjust to it. 
Lost or unrequited love is frequently the reason people want to write down their emotions; nothing wrong with that at all, but I suspect that you need to polish your rhymes a little. 
PTV

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