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By jammycarrot
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08 January 2008 |
Maybe I do have time to post another one today......
(Yes, I know I'm in a good mood and it's not normal....just go with it)
Enjoy
Careful what you say,
Sticks and stones may break more than bones,
But shatter the boundary of the outside world,
And lets them all come in.
Leaves, Wind and Rain.
Oh, and another thing,
Just to be aware of.
Make sure you get changed in the basement…
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Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 8th January 2008 | Jam,
Your very fey view of the world spoils, sometimes, what can otherwise be quite interesting ideas.
Not every piece has to have a punchline; because the punchlines ruin your ideas. As gutterkitty, I believe, said earlier.
If you intend to be a comedian, go and be a comedian; or a scriptwriter.
Or rein in your mind, so that it concentrates upon what you have said.
I am constantly berating people on here for just 'posting' without any serious intent, or with no commitment to the written word.
Think about it.
PTV
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Written by jammycarrot (50 comments posted) 8th January 2008 | Pete - I have about 60 poems written down either on paper or on the computer. About 6 have punchlines.
Poem's cannot be defined by anything, that is the beauty of poetry, that you are free to write about anything that crosses your mind. Why can't a poem have a comical element to them? Not all poems have to be prose, on serious subjects, or even have to be taken in a serious context at all. I write poems on the spur, writing whatever my mood takes me. If I'm depressed I'll write more depressing, feeling based poetry, if i'm happy, then my poetry reflects that too.
I'm sorry if you find this not to your liking, or that non-serious poetry doesn't do anything for you. This isn't a serious piece, but then again, this isn't always a serious world we live in.
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Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 8th January 2008 | Jam,
You're right; you write for yourself.
I'm not suggesting that every piece of poetry has to have a serious side - you should listen to "Under Milk Wood" (Dylan Thomas), which although a voice play and a script is almost entirely poetry; and comical poetry into the bargain.
But there are stratas.
What you are currently showing us is a strata below the surface of your abilities.
Just think along those lines.
I don't propse to take issue with you when you say "you can't define poetry". People far more competenet than either of us have been trying down the centuries.
But there is an INDEFINABLE something (as you say, indefinable) that the reader can recognise as poetry; poetry is in a different league to verse; and may not be the same thing to everyone; but what you have, here, is not even verse - because of the punchline.
PTV
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