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My Shinning Star
By SteadyBeat
09 January 2008

Hey guys!
Here's a poem i wrote a while ago. Hope you guys find it interesting.
Feedback would be very much appreciated!

Cheers.



My Shinning Star 

On a quiet, serene night,
the stars glitter bright.
My thoughts fade away,
into your eyes I stray. 

Your love so captivating,
it Locks on me like hand cuffs.
Not so incarcerating,
but rather emancipating. 

You bring out the best in me.
You set my inner feelings free.
Eye to eye we stare,
heart to heart we bare. 

Stars may be far,
unreachable,
Oh, so distant they are!
..But my star,
is not that far. 

Her head resting on my arm,
she asks about our star.
I contemplate and say,
You are my shinning star…

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Written by Steve_K (55 comments posted) 13th January 2008
Yo steadybeat. I don't normally like rhyming poems but this one kicks ass. Second stanza's my favourite with the paradox of handcuff's freeing yourself. Good Stuff...

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