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Bought with Blood

By Hellcat

12 January 2008

I'm not even sure about this one, so criticism is definately welcome!

I decided to omit the last stanza as it was written when I was slightly intoxicated ;)

Great leaders and rulers with the madness of kings,
those tyrants that sit on their thrones,
Kill their white lambs, cut into the flesh,
and laugh as they feast on the bones.

Slaughtering the innocent to praise the wicked,
their blood shall run from the earth,
To quench the thirst of you and your kind,
waiting to dine since birth.

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Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 12th January 2008

Hello, HC,
Something of a mystery piece, indeed; should not line one of stanza two read "rulers" and madeness must be a typo.
Half inclined to suggest that you invert the stanzas, so that 'slaughtering' etc. follows on as a result.
Not quite sure that 'praise' is correct? A word like 'fulfil', something along those lines?
Sorry, probably not helpful at all; verses written under the affluence of incohol are very often something to be viewed with a degree of suspicion later. Although de Quincey, of course, was proverbially high - and, in this modern age, are not many?
PTV

Mystified
Written by Josie (2844 comments posted) 12th January 2008

Hellcat, I would love to review your poem, but I haven't a clue about what you are writing. Perhaps you need something to enlighten us in your introduction.

Written by punchy (533 comments posted) 12th January 2008

Is this about religous war?
would have liked to see the last stanza!

Written by Hellcat (63 comments posted) 12th January 2008

Holy moly, that one was a mess, huh? Thanks for the typo warning Pete! Definately helped with the suggestions - gotta thank ye for that too.

Josie: I could tell ye what inspired it but I like when people interperet things their own way

However......

Punchy: more about how people in authority abuse their power than anything else - I promise to rework this piece to include the last stanza.

Thanks! You guys are great - you know I'm learning from y'all, right?

wow
Written by DulcetSprite (2 comments posted) 16th June 2008

wow. all i can say. I love they way every reader is left to find their own personal meaning in this poem. Makes it relate so much better.

props from south africa

Written by KaydieKate (75 comments posted) 4th August 2008

Wow. Enjoyed very much. Nice ring to it, the whole thing.

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