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Poetry
Beauty
By Star-Light
12 January 2008
Hi, it is often the case that the world is viewed negatively but the world can be a beautiful place and I hope my  poem reflects a little of this.

Thanks for taking the time to read it.

Star-Light

 

                             BEAUTY

  

For all the beauty within our world,
we sometimes fail to see,

For golden thoughts spread with love.
and given unselfishly.
 
The vibrancy of the humming bird,

So delicate its perfection,

The silver starlight on the sea,

And rippling reflection.
 

The coolness of a snowflake,

Whispering as it lays,

Sunlight patterns emerging from

A waterfall’s misty haze.
 

Bubbles of changing colour,

Breathing air into the light,

The vision of an owl

Gliding silently at night.

 

To rest on noble branches,

Of trees that touch the sky,

A haven of rest

 For winged creatures that do fly.
 

And amongst the roots do linger,

The tiny insects too,

A microscopic world,

Often hidden from our view.
 

A world within our world,

A part within the whole,

As important as any in

The Universal Soul.

Copyright © 2008

Reviews
Hello
Written by Josie (2772 comments posted) 12th January 2008
Hello Star-Light and welcome to GW. What a lovely poem, and this is another poem, like Embro's which points out that there is beauty in even the smallest things. Read the poem below which I wrote called Infinite Wisdom and based on William Blake's words. It ties in exactly with what you are saying. If I have to find something to help you with it is this: First two lines are too long. They are each two lines joined. Easily split. Then I think the poem would be better divided into verses. Four lines in a verse would be a good idea. Hope this helps improve your poem a little.

Written by punchy (499 comments posted) 12th January 2008
Lovely poem. Nicely written.
Hi Star-Light
Written by embro (126 comments posted) 13th January 2008
Your poem has the 'feel-good' factor and is quite uplifting. 
I enjoyed reading it. 
embro

Written by Star-Light (13 comments posted) 13th January 2008
Thank you all for the kind comments I really appreciate it especially as I feel such a novice reading some of the others contributions on GW.

Written by JininyC (13 comments posted) 14th January 2008
Hey Star Light, I can honestly say, Ilove this !. It's brilliant. Thank you for posting it. I think that not enough people write about, the good, the funny, and the nicer things in life. Great.
Well done
Written by Anberlin (4 comments posted) 14th January 2008
really like this one, it flows well and the descriptive language you use in it is beautiful...i especially like 'breathing air into the light...' don't ask me why,but its my favourite line :grin  
 
Anberlin x

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