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Poetry
My Angel
By JininyC
13 January 2008

Hi, the name is Jay, this is one of my first, please let me know what you think.


Every morning I gaze into your eyes,
I get lost in the hazels and greens of the window to your soul
I count myself lucky, that I have someone to treasure,
Someone to love and someone to say goodnight to
I think how is it that a guy like me, could get someone like you
What did I do to deserve the comfort and security
And the feeling when you wrap me in your arms,
I never believed that there could be someone for me
As wonderful, caring and unselfish as you
And for that I thank whatever higher power has smiled on me
It’s then that I realise the truth
You are my heaven on earth, my angel.

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Written by Karenhoffen (37 comments posted) 13th January 2008
I think it is lovely. You are a true romantic! 
 
Only negative is that I think you need to look at the punctuation - a few more full-stops. 
 
It is nicely balanced and ends well.
Hi Jay
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 13th January 2008
lovely, lovely, lovely. 
Bernie

Written by DressedInPoetry (23 comments posted) 22nd January 2008
Beautifully romantic. 
The only thing that I would suggest is using stronger words. For example, instead of "I get lost in the hazels...", perhaps use something to the effect of "I become entranced by the hazels...". In a romantic poem, things like that make all the difference. 
Still, it is lovely. Very nice.

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