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Loss
By punchy
15 January 2008
Don't be scared to review please.It's all good x



I had a little light
It grew inside my womb
I felt it deep within
But I never gave it room

Something took it back
The light began to fade
I couldn't face the pain
So my biggest wall I made

It wasn't meant be
But loss is hard to bare
I kept it locked within
But now I need to share

The baby that I lost
Was a special part of me
But now I have my faith
I can feel the loss and grieve

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Written by margarita (30 comments posted) 15th January 2008
hey there, 
well, its quite a deep and personal piece this. there's some really nice imagery of the baby as a light. Also there's a nice comparison between the baby inside the womb and the sorrow that you "lock within" The simple verses act as a lullaby and as sad as the story is there's a very warm feeling from it. As if you being able to talk about it creates the hope in the poem. 
I liked it a lot and hope everything's ok with you now.

Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 15th January 2008
P, 
Very touching. 
You may be surprised that men can have much (although very probably only a tiny percentage) of the same feelings of loss in these circumstances - although in my own case the circumstances may have been different. 
I shall post a very small, tight piece I wrote many years ago. 
PTV

Written by Josie (2844 comments posted) 19th January 2008
Sad little piece.

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