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Marble House
By margarita
15 January 2008
Slowly the rest of the world began to turn
As if stiff from too much time unwound on the shelf.
The top shelf-always dusty- still deems a lusty second look,
More out of respect than desire, of what it had once achieved.
The warm stained surface is now the docile grandmother
The wobbly screw a random glitch in the memory.
And who are you to judge?
As if time had any time for you-
Sharing its ancient secrets with the cartographer around the corner
You- scratched knees and torn jeans- listened half heartedly behind the fence.
At least you chose your side.
And sucking on borrowed plums, late in those sultry evenings
When harvest seems to suggest some coy expectation
From every roaming eye,
You feel the cold steel:
Right at the centre of things
Spiraling under plates and through roasting red rivers
And you feel the true ancestry
The wide and motherly span of this ancient mossy stone.

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Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 15th January 2008
M, 
Hi, 
Some wonderful words, pictures, ideas. 
This is one of those pieces that the reader needs to suckle on, to savour every phrase, to get behind the words - to the kernel. 
On reading it twice, I think it's about childhood. Probably very wrong. 
But I shall keep looking at it. 
Incidentally, you've posted in the second area, rather than the third - there's a line for title, an area for author's comment (which comes out in the rosy hue, as all authors' comments are wont to do!), and then space for the body of your work. 
Got it wrong myself, to start with. 
Like this, though. 
Very enigmatic; very deep, very interesting. 
PTV

Written by margarita (30 comments posted) 16th January 2008
Hi there, 
Thanks for the great review...and the old "where to write tip"...I'm still learning the ropes here! 
You're not wrong at all in saying its about childhood in as much as its about the effects of childhood on the adult, and the vey innate, circular motions of life. The link between creation and living, evolution and the mind...etc 
But its also up for total interpretation...I'm thinking of something specfic that became abstract....thanks for the review again...look forward to reading moor of your stuff as well. 
Margarita

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