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Ode to Stokey
By Beatnikgal
18 January 2008



Towards the A10 I rode the 106 bus, my nose pressed to the window. My eyes, hungry, like an after school child’s. Past the men; tall, with their Torah filled hats, entering houses where candles shine from windows into the night like hiccups of laughter. Turn left and take right. Stop outside the white goods shop "SellFridges". Onto Stoke Newington High Street, that vein of activity pulsing through the borough of Hackney. There is the Turkish Members’ Club where the men sit at Formica tables, watch television and step outside for words and cigarettes.


I go further, past Café Z, the Bagel House and the grocers that sells salty breakfast cheese. Here is Dalston, the west Indian community and the irrefutable pride and certainty of nationality. Home to the Rio, endless £1+ shops and the dirtiest KFC toilets since Bangkok.


It’s like being a tourist all of the time. You are a visitor and you have to unravel the secrets by being curious and watchful and earning the clues about the people who live about you. On my street, people walk past like chess pieces in the late stages of a game.


My lover told me that eventually we would unwrap this street like a lucky dip and take its dirt and colours into our mouths like cold smooth marbles. We lie, playing twister without the board and say over and over how lucky we are. To have a home, to live in a place of intrigue, to want to live and explore. To have each another.


We are playing on our checkerboard. She as dark as I am fair. And both of us just young things on this street, throwing our lot in together and hoping. Just naively, joyfully hoping for happy surprises only.


Reviews

Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 18th January 2008
At last someone who writes something positive about multi-culturalism. Usually it's either doom and gloom and cynicism, or some sort of elitist 'cosmopolitanism'. This is a normal person telling about the wonders of having so many different people and cultures around. No 'they take our jobs', nor 'I am so tolerant and world-wise', just a normal person in a normal world enjoying the differences in a normal way. 
 
People should learn to appreciate it as an enormous wealth, rather than a threat to have so many different cultures around. I love learning about other cultures, religions and languages and noticed people are often more than happy to explain their ways. 
 
Somehow it seems natural to me, being of mixed race and growing up with friends from many different backgrounds, but it doesn't seem to be like that for everyone... 
 
I liked this piece a lot, especially because of the optimism behind it.

Written by Beatnikgal (2 comments posted) 18th January 2008
Hi Thanks so much for your kind comments. The agenda pushing wasn't a conscious thing. I am genuinely just in awe of the dicersity of London and excited by all the different cultures that reside (almost always!) peacefully in Stoke Newington. 
 
Thanks for reading my work! 
 
Kerry :)
Interesting...
Written by Steve_K (55 comments posted) 18th January 2008
This was really interesting reading. Yes this could definitely come under the heading "short story". Beautiful image when you said: "My lover told me that eventually we would unwrap this street like a lucky dip and take its dirt and colours into our mouths like cold smooth marbles." That sentence was gorgeous. Nice write.

Written by Asferthecat (851 comments posted) 18th January 2008
I loved touches like "the dirtiest KFC toilets since Bangkok." You seem to know the area well and describe it with wit and insight. Actually I was a bit phased by the idea of taking dirt into one's mouth. 
 

Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 19th January 2008
I liked this very much. Just the lilt of the words were enough to enjoy - and Feldermaus is right - you explored your themes without agenda - they just were. In places, I thought this was beautifully written. Only crit would be the very first line - it seems clumsy to me. 
 
Lovely piece, thoughtfully crafted. Super first post. 
 
Phil

Written by Beatnikgal (2 comments posted) 23rd January 2008
Hi, 
 
Thanks all very much for reading and for your kind comments. I agree about the first line being clunky and lots of people picked up on it when I submitted it to another site too! 
 
Thanks for the warm welcome! :grin I'll have to go and earn my revieing stripes now too! 
 
Kerryx

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