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By maipenrai
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20 January 2008 |
an attempt at an acrostic!! Periods of peace and
Offerings to the God of
Victimhood only
Elicit tales of envy for the
Rights of man are but fiction,
Times change but justice is still
Yearned for by many. |
Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 20th January 2008 | The acrostic worked, but it's a pity you had to break off lines in the middle of phrases to get it. Somehow it seems to me one shouldn't break off in the middle of constituents unless it serves a special purpose with respect to the rhythm. But then, I'm more a linguist than a poet 
I suppose that as an humanitarian aid (so says your profile), you must seen a lot of poverty.
| Hi Fledermaus
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 21st January 2008 | Thanks for your comments.
Sad to say your right I have seen a lot of poverty.
Bernie |
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