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What can I get you dear?
By mad_uncle_jack
24 January 2008
This is a small part of a much larger work which concerns a village carnival, the poem below is spoken by the village Undertaker, (who speaks entirely in rhyming verse) in response to the question 'what can I get you dear?'



Dear Lady, refreshment is that which I crave,
a cup that revives without intoxication,
reminding of clippers on towering wave,
Calcutta to London, a drink for the nation'

'Come to afternoon tea served with crumpet and scone,
around four of the clock', read the Duchess' invite
'remember your hat, mustn't lower the tone
we will sit on the lawn if the weather is bright'

A Victorian Lady and Gentleman friend,
'A lump of a slice, prey what do you take?
...and how is your Mother, is she on the mend?'
A pleasant exchange over Battenberg cake

But clink the cup sides, slurp tea from the spoon,
or, (heaven forbid!), pour it into the saucer,
place your spoon on the left, look up as you sip,
point with your utensils, oh what could be coarser?

A crime against England! you would rightly be tried
and sentanced to hanging until nearly dead
Then dragged through the streets, to a cart you'd be tied
Insulted, beheaded and dismember-ed!

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Hello Jack
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 24th January 2008
Ha Ha - a very funny poem. Slurping tea? Not cocking your little finger? Disgraceful! Quite right. You've obviously worked hard on your rhyming and the abab scheme is quite difficult. The tiitle is catchy and your dialogue quite right for this poem. You will notice from my own poems that I like dialogue in them. It makes them more interesting I think when you're telling a story in poetic form. A very good start.

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