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Poetry
Moments
By petetheverse
25 January 2008
R.I.P

MOMENTS

 



To be shaken awake,

To dress in the dark,

To leave the house quiet and stealthy;

Moments plucked from the pages

Of children’s adventure –

Arthur Ransome, or Biggles, or Blyton.

 


The known lanes of daytime

Are fluttered by headlights;

The moon’s a pale hint

Or a glint through the leaves,

While dawn’s a half-promise

At the edge of the sky.

 


Shoes clatter the pebbles

On a shore of the lake;

Fells loom in their slumber;

The dawn and the moonlight

Have merged in the water, dark

And unrippled, and shadowed in vapour.

 


From the end of the valley

A crackle and cough; and a growl;

And the rumble and grumble of a thunder

Man-made; and the whine of a turbine;

Then a silence, made loud

By the wisp of an echo.

 


Now a spit and a snarl, and a howl,

Such a howl, that comes screaming and yowling

Over the water, its crabbed shell

A monster, the white of the water

The head of an arrow, "Bluebird" at practise,

Its speed unimagined, its wake a cascade.

 


While those waters have settled, those moments

Don’t fade; years later they burst to the surface –

The day that Campbell and ‘Bluebird’

Cartwheel over and under, the machine

And the man in a personal compact,

In that moment that stabbed at the nation.

Reviews

Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 25th January 2008
Wonderful poem, pete. I can still see Bluebird now, as you say, cartwheeling over the water. 
 
It was such a terrible shock, quite numbing. And nothing remains of him except the memory.

Written by fellpony (1702 comments posted) 26th January 2008
I got away on the wrong foot with this one because of the rhythm of the first stanza which reminded me of WS Gilbert's lyrics for comic songs in the Savoy operas. I see now that it develops into a genuine lament for Campbell and Bluebird. Audrie's actually wrong though in saying nothing remains of Campbell, because he was of course found and brought up from the lake in 2001 and buried near the lake, and Bluebird is being rebuilt after being raised and displayed in a museum in Coniston.  
 
I remember seeing it on TV. Didn't realise it happened quite so early in the morning.
Slight misunderstanding
Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 27th January 2008
Fellpony 
The piece was written many years after Campbell's death, obviously. I wasn't there THAT time, which like many I saw on TV - the piece refers to having been taken to Coniston many years earlier, when I was still a child, to see Malcolm Campbell training, so to speak. Probably in a craft built before the one he ultimately died in. 
But it stuck in my memory for years, until I had the words with which to convey it. 
Thanks for taking the trouble to review it - especially after I had been so scathing, but with tongue in cheek (seriously) about GW. 
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