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By emilio

26 January 2008

    You shine as the sun drifts pass the night.
    The legs of a goddess as you tremble in
    in your frozen temple.
    Footprints are all that remain of our
    journey into the unknown abyss of
    our faces.
       It reflects against the rain of an abused night
       in the forest of dream.
       You contemplate your ego and the sufferings
       of a shipwreck that is never understood...naked
       and pale we remained under the stars....
                a fabric explosion of love and a large
                rusted material that we refer to as
                   mother.

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Written by fellpony (1616 comments posted) 26th January 2008

I'm sorry to say i did not understand this. I was confused from the first line and found the references meant nothing to me as I progressed. Even obscurity has to hint at a meaning, and there were too many conflicting here to offer me any sort of coherence. Sorry.

Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 26th January 2008

Sorry emilio - lost in a sea of too clever (or ill conceived) references that leave me a little frustrated. I have no problem in having to work at poems - but I like to have a little to go on and a little more guidance as I read.

Sorry.

Phil.

Written by gerardconnolly (1186 comments posted) 26th January 2008

Contrived, pretentious drivel.

Written by margarita (30 comments posted) 28th January 2008

Again Emilio, I really liked this poem...I enjoy poetry for it how sounds and what it inspires in you...smetimes a mesh of images and metaphors etc can be put together without having instant meaning nor being fully approachable.
iit's a sound!
Ceers

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