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Swimming
By iliketosmile
26 January 2008
I felt dizzy, when I closed my eyes the whole room was swimming. Well how else to explain it? Swimming was what I thought at the time and swimming is what I think now. Oh but I can hear you tut at me, Gina, Gina, Gina, we didn't bring you up to use such mediocre words, you need to speak from the heart. But its true. The room swam around me and it was moving left, then right, it would just not stay still. My head would just lunge to the right, then lunge to the left and all the time the room was swirling. It felt so pretty. It always did but I don't even like swimming. I didn't want it to stop but it did, my ear popped and then it started to slow. I called to my brother and waited patiently for the room to still. After about 10 seconds it came to a standstill. I paused cautious. Just in case it started up again but it didn't, I waited again and nothing came. It wont now, not till next time. Till next year. Oh well, till next time then.

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Written by Phil (6719 comments posted) 27th January 2008
I can see the reasoning behind this - I hope - but if I'm honest, I don't think you pulled it off. Sorry. 
 
Phil

Written by iliketosmile (2 comments posted) 28th January 2008
fair enough... 
any constructive crit??

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