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Poetry
Silverpoint
By Missinginaction
06 October 2005
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Another cheap theft:
picked wild flower,
tide-tumbled pebble,
strand of his life's gossamer
through the judas grid
on double elephant,
foreign whispers, faint signals.
 
Shrug back at what's undrawn,
sidestep  beeline
arrowheads of focus,
la page est introuvable
the page cannot be found
all my sites crash at once.
 
Human channel hop
flits repined, reads walls,
pianoman thoughts
a twisted phone cord.
 
Deeper - where next?
The hair, why straggle it unflattering?
He would have moulded
northern morning light
yet his eyes disparage sleep,
swim the night pelagic,
writhe at his cursed reflection.
 
Charred deception arcs
across our times
then crackles.
 
His silverpoint
plays with shadows,
with parhelion glare
while I can only cross-hatch
with the stump of a jaded 2B.

Reviews

Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 9th October 2005
I find this beautifully written with wonderful phrases, but must admit that I don't think I understand it. Maybe I think it is a sort of frustration at things going wrong.

Written by Raindog (6 comments posted) 10th October 2005
This is marvellous work. The imagery is vivid and addictive. You conjure up a snapshot of ennui, artist-block frustration and lack of communication.  
The first stanza is gorgeous but spoilt by the 'life's gossamer' line which is by far the weakest in the piece. Excellent. 

Written by amboline (183 comments posted) 9th November 2005
Have to admit there's a lot in it I don't get either - but I loved "swim the night pelagic" for some reason! :grin

Written by mrsdecember29 (10 comments posted) 6th December 2007
:sigh wow that was iteresting but i didnt get it at all. keep trying and youll get it but im confused what is that about im totally lost but good job.i guess.

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