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love lottery
By Sakura
26 January 2008
This was originally called 'lottery' - which I prefer - but I don't know whether its meaning would be clear with that title.

I seem to have missed something.
Destiny?
Can't be.
But sinking down within
I have this ache -
someone took my place, or will...
Inevitably.
Like waiting to be shot, or at best
the creeping unrest of people
watching TV.
Millions crying inwardly -
IT SHOULD BE ME

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Written by Phil (8763 comments posted) 26th January 2008
I don't want to like this - it feels incomplete and lacks development to give depth - but there's something about it I can't just dismiss. The lines:  
 
I have this ache - 
someone took my place, or will... 
Inevitably. 
 
kept drawing me back.  
 
This does have something, but for me, it needs work.  
 
Phil

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