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Poetry
audition
By shoelace
27 January 2008

not everything staged is an act ...



The lights have dimmed
The curtains open
You step forward into
A spotlight of blue
That beams straight from
The center of my heart
The opening performance
Of your self-created part in this play
Called my life
Is now center-stage


Everyone's waiting in the wings
Stage left wants a part in coaching you
To become one with your audience
Stage right wants a part in cutting your starring role
Erasing your potential


Me, I am the audience
There are several of me seated in the
Chairs made of donated scrap wood and metal
We sit here
All of me
Waiting eagerly for your lines
Watching
Listening
Wondering if you will stumble
We are waiting for your theatrics


Your lips part
But I don't hear a sound
Other than the creaking of my own
Failing foundation


The spotlight of blues is becoming
Blinding
I see you wince
I know it's distracting you
I put my hands together
As if to applaud
Then I spread my palms
And rest my shaking hands over my chest


The blues flicker in the core of your eyes
I steady my hands
and soften the sharp and glaring sadness
We sigh
Relieved and knowing
that the blue diversion
was too much
for a single actor
and an audience of one


A spotlight appears from the rafters
it blinds and rids
the shadows your past

Now the stage is fully lit

no shadows
no past
no blues
you are now free
to take
your first real chance
To give
the greatest audition
Of your life


copyright 2007


Reviews

Written by Phil (6738 comments posted) 27th January 2008
I liked the idea behind this one and how many elements made up the whole 'performance.' I did think that some ideas were over stated. Perhaps this could be improved by distilling down further - perhaps not. Ididn't find the short lines helped the piece to flow - that may be personal preference. 
 
An odd thought: the whole of life can be seen as an audition - and when it's over we're dead. 
 
BTW: the on screen text is very small and difficult to read. 
 
Phil

Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 27th January 2008
Agree with Phil that this text is very small and very faint. Enlarge your text next time. 
 
Thought this was very insightful(if there is such a word!) and cleverly done to put the spotlife on your life.
Thanks,
Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 28th January 2008
Shoelace, the text is fine now.

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