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Reaction to Pleasure
By margarita
28 January 2008
definitely a work in progress....there's something there that I'm trying to describe....but it's really difficult! Hope you find somehting you like in it.

And now that it has happened one can just stretch out
And chew on the chain reaction of the butterfly effect,
Lazy and full from late nights drinking, loving
Wrapped up in our own small world that we ourselves concocted
It's sweet and bashful and crafted honesty.
Something ancient and divine about ourselves urges us to linger longer.
Stay a while, stay away from those trivial other-worldly tasks.
Eye to eye, trying to find my way in those towering deeppools
I try to trace your smile with my toungue
I catch those shifty whispers through the sheets,
And all the sound creeps out of the room
And its just you-
Laughing,
Breathing.

Reviews

Written by emilio (12 comments posted) 28th January 2008
" I try to trace your smile with my tongue" 
kinky. Love it.

Written by audrie (454 comments posted) 28th January 2008
This very good. It tells a story and gives the feelings of relaxation after sex, when there i 
are only the two of you in your own little world.

Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 29th January 2008
Evocative of moments that most of us are very lucky to have enjoyed. 
Just a little query - the apostrophe in "its"? 
I like the ending. 
Although one-worders are often frowned upon. 
Not by me/I, though. 
PTV

Written by Veronica_Milvus (746 comments posted) 2nd February 2008
I like the "shifty whispers"

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