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Juvenescence
By DressedInPoetry
30 January 2008

Prompt: Write a poem beginning with a famous saying. Include 5 words out of a list somewhere within the poem.


“A penny saved is a penny earned”.

My mother always told me this

As she handed me a coin-

A beautiful, shiny coin with

‘Happiness’ written across the front,

For I was a big girl

When I could buy a gumball

With my own money-

And she would expect me to

Pretend that I was listening to her voice

When I was really on a far-off cloud,

Dreaming of what I could get with

My brand-new shiny coin.

 

Ah, the euphoria of the days

When a coin was all I needed to

Make me smile.

 

For the coin was not just a coin-

No, it could be anything I wanted:

A pile of blackberries-

So deliciously juicy-

Or a new toy-

Perfect in its glory.

 

Those days went by in a whir,

A whirlwind of peppermint dreams

And ice cream hopes.

How I long for those same times

When a simple, shiny coin

Meant I could buy the world.

Reviews
fun
Written by fellpony (1522 comments posted) 30th January 2008
I liked the light touch you used here to paint innocence and naivete (in the best sense). A nice series of images of the wholehearted joys of childhood.
Agree
Written by audrie (444 comments posted) 30th January 2008
with fellpony. Reminded me of when I was a child and got a Milky Way every week with my pocket money, but how I longed for twice as much so that I could buy a Mars Bar.

Written by Phil (6439 comments posted) 30th January 2008
Liked the idea behind this but couldn't help thinking it might be better expressed as a piece of nostalgic prose. Clearly I'm in the minority - so probably wrong. 
 
Phil.

Written by DressedInPoetry (23 comments posted) 30th January 2008
Thank you! 
 
Phil, I don't think there's a way to be "wrong" in an opinion. Maybe one day I'll write a rhyming poem so you can see why I stick to prose-poetry instead. Or maybe I will write a short story.

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