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Simple Chemistry
By DressedInPoetry
30 January 2008
I was bored in Chemistry.

Opposites attract

(Like the negative and positive ends of a polar molecule,

We are strangely attracted in a kind of dipole-dipole force).

It’s simple Chemistry:

The negative never ends up with a negative,

Which is somewhat good for you and I,

For we are two completely different people

(Perhaps similar seeming on the outside,

But we have different reactions when

Mixed with a chemical-

I explode, like sodium thrown into water,

While you have a more peaceful reaction,

Similar to that of hydrochloric acid and magnesium).

 

So maybe the attraction will stay,

Unless it is like a London dispersion force:

Only momentary, instantaneous,

Eventually dissolved.

Perhaps I should stop trying to find

The chemical formula for everything

And just go with what happens,

Flowing like a fluid

Through every gaping hole

We come to.

 

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Written by audrie (451 comments posted) 30th January 2008
This is very clever and you should certainly learn to go with the flow. 
Analysing too much leads into far too many pathways. 
 
Let the chemistry take over and - enjoy!

Written by DressedInPoetry (23 comments posted) 30th January 2008
Thank you!

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 30th January 2008
I did like the first verse [or block] It had a bit of subversive wit and a wild brio about it but the second verse was like a lead weight on it pulling it down into the common place. Often 'less is more' as they say 

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