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An Opportune Break
By margarita
31 January 2008
Silver and then sliver and then breath.
Laughter and then contagious-
Like an irresistible stretch,
And a yawn in the classroom when trying your best
To act involved and at ease with your very own intellect.
Delectable the notion of exploring the oceans of opportunities
That lie right beside you.
Denied but with nothing left to lose
Because you've been here and worse,
So each shared second only soothes.
What soft ointment to care for the tender tear,
The pair of them a resolution
Like a sunset in substitution for
A reason to go there separate ways.

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A question that needs an answer
Written by Warchild (5 comments posted) 2nd February 2008
Like the known poets ,i think you should look at the structure because that also adds to the beauty of your poem since there is no enjabment , you shouldn`t write them together. If there where ideas in a verse then i could have related to them. secondly there is the imagery this is what makes most poem wonderful they show you things you know but have never thought about. So is it the reveiw you want

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