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An Ode From Your Unborn Child
By Warchild
02 February 2008
 The voice we never hear has this to say

  I don`t know what to say
  but i will say what i know.
  Tomorrow will be another day
   and someone will deny a seed a chance to grow.

  Some babies are meant to be born
  some are born to be dumped
  while others are created to be loved.
  The remaining ones are those never to be known.

  The later are the people of my race.
  We are the unknown who have no place,
  call us the seeds that will not grow.
 We are the angels you will never know.

  We live in a world created by your darkness.
   There we have been swimming in the waters of lonliness
   but it is better than living in your world of tragedies.
   Who is next after Hurricance Katrina?

  I wouldn`t waste time telling you what you did
  you did something decency forbids.
  There is no excuse you can offer,
  that can justify the blood you shed on GOD`S altar.
  That we know men like Ceaser and Brutus
   is because they were allowed to grow from a foetus.
   I just want to know who made you GOD?
   Now that you decide who lives and who does not.

 

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Written by Phil (6683 comments posted) 2nd February 2008
For me, two ideas here that are confused individually and further muddied by their combination and digression into perilously linked events. 
 
Generally, a little trite and sweeping. However - there's something about the third verse that contains more than the rest. It has a powerful idea that could be explored further. I'm not sure telling this from the POV of an unborn child is the best way forward - unless you make big changes to content. 
 
Just an opinion. 
 
Phil

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