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By Veronica_Milvus
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03 February 2008 |
OK, I know that it defeats the object of haiku to have three of them in a row expanding the same scenario. But I was bored in a business meeting last October and doodled these lines. I think boredom is the main emotion portrayed here.
BOSTON HAIKU
The fall mood is grey
The airport wrapped in soft mist:
Fog falls on parked planes.
In the meeting room
We wrangle over wording:
It grows dark outside.
My mind has moved on:
A sour apple martini
Floating red cherry.
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Written by petetheverse (164 comments posted) 3rd February 2008 | Yes, V, I think a haiku is just one of the ways of allowing the mind to drift away from everyday. I once did a series of 10, linked as one; unsurprisngly, it never worked.
I doubt that Haiku has any place in 'English' verse, at all; perhaps it's just an English teacher's easy get out; for he/she will never find a 'correct' one!
I'm probably stacking up brickbats, though!
Pete | Haiku addiction
Written by patterjack (1159 comments posted) 3rd February 2008 | I agree TTV that if you are looking for real poetry from your pupils, haikus can be a dangerously easy cop out
They can become addictive , with a lot of rubbish being churned out . In this they are very similar to concrete verse and similar tricksy poetic techniques , including the so often badly written limerick .
BUT : it is a way of getting pupils to recognise syllables , and of introducing them to some discipline in word use, to encapsulate an emotion in a few lines etc. , as long as it is used as a stepping stone. But sometimes one can also find a real gem among an otherwise ordinary student exercise resulting in a student's self esteem rising through an acknowledged accomplishment .
Its major advantage however is that it can bring pupils to see the beauty of the simple image , a vision of reality that eschews the abstract while at the same time exhibiting deep emotion
I broke myself of the haiku habit by developing a unified series -- close to 30 of them if I remember correctly -- published on GW if only to get them out of my hair .So they have therapeutic uses too .
Don't denigrate your own work too much , V
patterjack | I like haiku
Written by fellpony (1580 comments posted) 4th February 2008 | | but as patterjack points out they are addictive. I think the essence of a haiku is lost when you put several together. Japanese forms (eg, haiku, tanka) seem to need a central line that is pivotal to the whole poem and changes line one (lines 1 & 2 in tanka) into something else by line three (lines 4 & 5 in tanka); very hard to do in such a compressed format. I read somewhere that Japanese poets would write scores in a day, trying to capture the varying fleeting details of their local landscapes. |
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