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The Cloak of Invisibility
By ianhobsonuk
03 February 2008
 

A short, short story.


 

©2003 Ian Hobson


Sam lay in the grass with his head resting on his pack and his legs crossed at the ankles. He turned a page of the novel he was reading. His companion lay nearby, looking up at the grey sky. 'It's not much of a day, is it, Sam?' he said.


'No, but at least it's not raining. And this is as good a place as any for us to put our feet up for a while.'


'What's that you're reading, Sam?'


'Harry Potter.'


'What, the first one?'


'Yeah. Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone.'


'I didn't realise you'd brought that with you... Let me guess. You're just reading it to see what all the fuss was about?'


'That's right. How did you know?'


'I read it for the same reason. I can see why kids like it though. I bet they'd love to go to school and learn magic and how to fly around on broomsticks, instead of doing their regular lessons.'


Sam scratched at his head. 'Aye, I think you've got a point there. I'd have certainly enjoyed my school days a lot better if they'd been like that.'


'You can tell she was a Tolkien fan.'


'Who, JK Rowling?'


'Yeah.'


'Yeah, I suppose you’re right: wizards n' magic n' all. And that cloak thing that makes him invisible; not quite the same as Bilbo’s ring, but near enough... I wouldn't mind having a cloak like that. It'd come in useful, sometimes.'


'You can say that again.'


'I wouldn't mind having a cloak like that. It'd come in useful, sometimes.'


'Very funny... Is that her real name, Sam? JK Rowling, I mean.'


'I don't know... I suppose so... Have you seen the film?


'No, have you?'


‘No, they say it's not as good as the book.'


'They never are, Sam.'


'It'll be getting dark soon.'


'It will, Sam. I suppose we better be thinking about moving on. You got any food left in your pack?'


'Not much. How about you?'


'Couple of biscuits.'


'Same here. Shall we finish 'em up?'


'No, we better not. Better to save them. We've a long way to go.'


'How far do you reckon we've walked since we left the others?'


'I don't know. I've lost count of the miles... Are you ready then, Sam?'


'Aye, Mister Frodo.'


'Come on then. And keep and eye out for that Gollum creature. I'm sure he's still following us.'


*****


Art + stories: http://ianhobson.blogspot.com

Reviews

Written by Phil (6951 comments posted) 3rd February 2008
Droll, very droll. Should have seen it coming I guess - but I didn't. 
 
Phil

Written by Lizzy (827 comments posted) 4th February 2008
I enjoyed this, and did see it coming but it didn't spoil the enjoyment. 
 
Had a look at your blog, impressed by the paintings as well as the writing 
Lizzy

Written by Kezzi (7 comments posted) 4th February 2008
Fantastic! xD 
 
I guess I should've seen that coming too, but I'm glad I didn't.

Written by emjaygee (16 comments posted) 4th February 2008
I never saw it coming! But I did enjoy the simplicity and wit of the dialogue.

Written by Fledermaus (3477 comments posted) 5th February 2008
It was the name Sam that gave away the end, but it's still fun.

Written by Asferthecat (859 comments posted) 10th February 2008
I see you wrote this five years ago. I like your style but I have a logical mind and this story had too many confusing problems number one being JK Rowling lived after Tolkein. Now, if one of her characters had been reading Lord of the Rings I could have swallowed it. 
 
I have looked at your web site, expecting to see that your paintings were interestingly interpretive. Instead, they are photo-real. I would welcome less logic in your paintings and more in your writing. 
 
Having said that, you are very talented in both. Plus there are two excellent stories on your website so I am assuming that, like the rest of us, you have improved over the years.
Thanks
Written by ianhobsonuk (180 comments posted) 15th February 2008
Thanks a lot everyone - especially Asfer - though I didn't expect anyone to take this story seriously. You know how it is: you get an idea for a story and you just have to write it. 
 
Ian

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