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Is this what Mum wanted?
By sheppard
09 October 2005

 

 

 

 

 

 


WE DIDN'T ASK TO GO TO WAR,

WE NEVER ASKED WHAT THE WAR WAS FOR,

WE WENT TO THE FRONT, OUR GUNS AT OUR SIDE,

LEAVING MY MUM, MY DAD, AND MY BRIDE.

 

THE ORDER CAME FOR US TO FIGHT,

IT WAS COLD, DAMP, THE DEAD OF NIGHT,

THEY ORDERED THE CHARGE,

OUR TIME HAD COME,

IS THIS WHY A MUM RAISES HER SON?

 

MY MATE BILL HE STARTED TO CRY,

WE WERE GOING TO KILL, BUT DIDN'T ASK WHY,

ALL AROUND THE  GUNS AND THE SCREAMS,

THEY'D SHATTERED OUR LIVES,

THEY'D SHATTERED OUR DREAMS.

 

THE CRY WENT UP, OUR BAYONETS FIXED

BY BREAK OF DAY WE'D HAVE THIS WAR LICKED,

ACROSS THE PLANE AND OUT IN THE FIELD,

WE WOULD FIGHT OUR RIGHTS, SEE EACH MAN KILLED.

 

BUT STIFF UPPER LIP, AND ON WITH THE ASSULT,

YOU AT HOME GIVE US SOME THOUGHT,

JUST ARMED WITH A BAYONET, PISTOL OR GUN,

IS THIS WHAT A MUM WANTS FOR HER SON?

 

SO AS I LAY IN THE MUD SO COLD,

AND KNOW THAT I WILL NEVER GROW OLD,

MY MUM, MY DAD, MY BRIDE WILL WAIT,

A MESSAGE WILL COME, ALL TOO LATE.

 

THEY WILL SAY WE WERE BRAVE, WE GAVE IT OUR ALL

DID WHAT EXPECTED, AND ANSWERED THE CALL,

SO MY TIME TO DIE HAS COME,

IS THIS WHY A MUM RAISES HER SON?

 

Reviews

Written by jean.day (2283 comments posted) 9th October 2005
Gosh. that's pretty powerful. I remember how scared I was that my son might get involved in the Iraq war.  
 
Thanks for your comments on my stories. I was especially pleased that you liked the Grandmother story as a previous review had thought it was a take off on religion, and I had been upset that it should come across that way.

Written by sheppard (36 comments posted) 9th October 2005
I wrote it after watching the news the other night, it made me think of how the mothers, fathers & wives must feel every day, but from the point of view of the son, if you see what I mean? 
 
Your Grandmothers story was excellent and I didn't think of it as a take off on religion, quiet the oposite! 
 
Well done, your work really is a pleasure to read. 
Thank you.
Excellent
Written by sara (29 comments posted) 11th October 2005
Hi Sheppard 
 
loved this poem, very moving

Written by faye (9 comments posted) 11th October 2005
Hi Sheppard 
 
i really enjoyed reading this poem, got me right in the heart.  
 
thank you for your comments on my untitled work, im a very very begginner and i was pleased that it spoke to you like it did, also i had been a bit deflated by the other comments so thank you. 
 
faye :grin

Written by MaxCarey (7 comments posted) 13th March 2008
I really enjoyed this. It has got me thinking about just how directly opposed to each other love and war are.

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