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How Ironic.......
By eeerm
06 February 2008
Well I wrote this on another blog site but thought maybe I could get a good bunch of reviews here???

He hummed to himself with delight as the wind brushed past his face. There was no better time than a cool night in the middle of august for a trip like this one. It concerned him how close this dream was to ending. If the mass continued destroying the world with their pollution then it would all be over. There would be nothing left for him to enjoy to the capacity that he did this. He hated the way they drove around in their little ferraries and built buildings so close together just so they could all queue and show off their great ice melting heaps of metal. He despised the way the people always left their lights on, even when they were asleep. It was the aeroplanes that got to him the most. whatever happened to the good old natural earth when people used to walk to their destination?? More and more, the humans wanted to fly. It just wasn't natural said he. Those beings weren't meant to fly so why do they persist on doing so at the cost of the beloved planet?? He knew he had to take every oppurtunity available to him. Maybe he would bring Martha along next time. She was always nagging about how much time he spent on his own. He loved her so and her birthday was coming up soon. The perfect oppurtunity to show her how much he cared. He would take Martha away into his world for the day. An insight into his mind is perhaps what he was thinking about providing for her. But Martha will never know. Forever she will be wondering about his last thoughts. What was going through his mind when he was chopped to a thousand pieces. Did he feel any pain when he flew into the propeller???


Any comments are welcome :)

Reviews

Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 6th February 2008
Good twist in the end. A very original main character you chose. 
 
Recently it has been claimed (not sure by whom) that the internet is far worse for the environment than airplanes, as it takes a lot of energy to keep all these computers and data-centres running. 
 
I do think humanity will hit its head hard when they'll run out of resources. Instead of trying to come up with new sources (such as nuclear fusion, which may well be the most destructive of all, for it's irreversible), people'd better start to use the ones they have more efficiently. 
 
So far it seems though that those environmental-gurus are mainly concerned with filling their own pockets, and the whole climate-change debate seems to take the form of a trade in letters of indulgence. 
 
But I'm rambling here. It's a good read.

Written by Phil (6393 comments posted) 6th February 2008
What?  
 
Sorry, eeerm. The story element to this is very random and motiveless. The main thrust of environmentalism might better be put forward as a non-fiction piece. 
 
Phil
Slightly Vague
Written by TwistedTales (454 comments posted) 8th February 2008
The piece seems slightly vague to me as well. It would suit the piece better if it is a part of the nonfiction section. Even the issue of saving the environment is not all that clear. It is there in bits and pieces, but it doesn't seem grave enough, if that was your idea that is.  
 
Regards, 
TT

Written by Asferthecat (789 comments posted) 10th February 2008
What is he - a seagull? How does he fly into a propeller? 
Perhaps he's a hang-glider. Where does he find a propeller plane? - I thought they were all jets now. It might be amusing if he flew into a wind turbine. 
This certainly generates thoughts - but not necessarily the ones you intended.

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